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Of course, I'm happy when an "old story" is dug up again and the author gets praise for it. Thank you very much!
I know Alex quite well; I invented him, too. He's always making a fuss and pretending to be exhausted. In reality, he likes being a horse; he's always dreamed of being one. Maybe not exactly a rodeo horse, but he can't choose that. After all, he'll be ridden by ladies who give their best, and he'll have the chance to give his best as well. His owners are happy about it, and they're willing to prepare him well for a competition. Training should be fun, too.
I think he won't break anything, even if the three of them really get him wild again; he'll be able to handle it, don't worry. You just have to motivate him properly, and he'll jump and dance like a young deer again. His riders know all the tricks.
Right, Mr. Co-Author, then the story continues, I'm very happy about that!
Max
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Hello Max (Your name makes me thinks in Mad Max the Road Warrior).
I'm glad that you, the original author of the story, agrees the story must continue, at least for a few more chapters.
I like the story, which is why I want to write a bit more about it. But I feel that the characters are different now. I'm not exactly sure what they're like. I've imagined them this way:
Sabine, the older sister and authoritarian leader.
Sarah, the younger sister, a cruel and playful girl.
Markus, the brother jealous of his younger sister.
And Alex, a defeated man who accepts his fate as a slave without fighting.
But I'm not sure if they still resemble the original story. But the story must continue.
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Pony for Girls wrote:
Hello Max (Your name makes me thinks in Mad Max the Road Warrior).
I'm glad that you, the original author of the story, agrees the story must continue, at least for a few more chapters.
I like the story, which is why I want to write a bit more about it. But I feel that the characters are different now. I'm not exactly sure what they're like. I've imagined them this way:
Sabine, the older sister and authoritarian leader.
Sarah, the younger sister, a cruel and playful girl.
Markus, the brother jealous of his younger sister.
And Alex, a defeated man who accepts his fate as a slave without fighting.
But I'm not sure if they still resemble the original story. But the story must continue.
Excellent idea. Just give it a try and go ahead.
I am really curious.
And to Max
really a very fine story.
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Thank you, I'm glad!
Of course, every other author is free to put their own stamp on the characters... otherwise, it would hardly be possible to continue the story.
Max
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Max, You are a good writer. Your stories are good. And the bull riding story is the Best
Frederik, You write the Best stories and experiences
Thanks for your comments
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Ok. It looks like chapter 5.2 of the story is well written. So I will write the next chapter as well, both in Spanish and in English.
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Ok, My friends, first here is the chapter 5.3 in spanish
Cap?tulo 5.3:
El Segundo Galope - Parte 1
El aire en la arena ol?a a cuero desgastado y tierra seca, mezcl?ndose con el sudor de Alex. El sol del mediod?a golpeaba el suelo levantando un calor que hac?a temblar el horizonte. Sarah, encaramada sobre el tercer riel de la puerta del corral, balanceaba sus botas vaqueras con un ritmo juguet?n, mientras esperaba para montar a su nuevo esclavo. Pero sus ojos brillaban con una mezcla de desaf?o y deleite que nada ten?a de inocente.
En el fondo de su mente, Sarah era un torbellino de emociones contradictorias: una joven impulsada por un deseo insaciable de control, quiz? nacido de una infancia donde siempre se sinti? eclipsada por sus hermanos mayores.
Sarah ten?a experiencia montando en caballos reales y en los hombros de caballos humanos. Pero un acto de dominaci?n, como este era para ella una experiencia nueva, una forma de reclamar el centro del escenario. Sentir que el toro humano se doblegaba a su voluntad... no era solo una monta m?s, era una nueva emoci?n, algo salvaje como una lucha de su voluntad contra la brutalidad del esclavo ahora en el papel de una bestia.
Montar a este semental le dio un sentimiento de control que la hac?a sentir superior. As? era como ella se ve?a a si misma. En ese momento, su coraz?n se emocionaba por la idea de sentir al fuerte semental bajo la silla.
Sarah mir? el temblor del cuerpo de Alex, el miedo que mostraba el esclavo era para ella era una prueba de su superioridad.
Pero debajo de esa excitaci?n, habia un sadismo sutil, un placer derivado de ver a otros sufrir, como si cada gemido de dolor ajeno confirmara su propio poder. Ella no era cruel por naturaleza, o al menos eso se dec?a a s? misma; simplemente la emoci?n de montar a Alex de esa forma la hac?a sentir como si fuera la due?a de su destino.
Sarah segu?a sentada sobre el tercer riel de la puerta del corral, la cuerda de cuero que sujetaba las partes ?ntimas de Alex colgaba floja en su mano, pero Sarah jugueteaba con ella entre sus dedos, enroll?ndola y desenroll?ndola con una sonrisa que revelaba su deleite interno. Su agarre era seguro, como si estuviera probando el peso de su poder sobre la vida de otro. Sus ojos, fijos en el esclavo que temblaba a poca distancia frente a ella, tenian una curiosidad m?rbida: ?cu?nto podr?a empujarlo antes de que se quebrara? Para Sarah, este rodeo humano, era un mundo nuevo y un emocionante juego. Una danza donde ella pod?a dirig?r cada paso.
Sabine, de pie junto a la cerca, observaba la escena con una expresi?n indescifrable, sus brazos cruzados y una fusta colgando despreocupadamente de su mano derecha. El cuero negro de la fusta reluc?a bajo el brillo del sol, un contraste inquietante con su calma aparente y su coraz?n g?lido. Sabine era diferente a su hermana menor: ella era la l?der autoritaria y de coraz?n fr?o que manten?a el orden en su familia, pero en su interior ten?a una tormenta de emociones. No era solo sadismo lo que la impulsaba; era una necesidad de control nacida de un pasado turbulento, donde el caos familiar la hab?a obligado a endurecerse.
Ver a Sarah disfrutar de estos momentos le provocaba una mezcla de envidia y orgullo, como si estuviera viendo una versi?n m?s libre de s? misma, pero tambi?n un cansancio profundo, un cuestionamiento sobre si este ciclo de dominaci?n realmente llenaba el vac?o en su alma.
De pronto, Sarah rompi? el silencio con una risita ligera, inclin?ndose ligeramente hacia adelante desde su perchero en la cerca. "M?ralo, Sabine... Parece tan... exhausto. Como si una sola monta m?s lo pudiera romper. Me hace sentir... invencible." Su voz era mel?dica, pero ten?a adem?s un tono juguet?n que hac?a que sus palabras se sintieran crueles. En su mente, estas palabras eran como una confesi?n: el placer que ella tendr?a solo del acto de ver c?mo el esp?ritu de Alex se somet?a con cada monta.
Sabine lade? la cabeza, sus ojos entrecerrados mientras estudiaba a su hermana. "Exhausto o no, Sarah, es tuyo para montar. Pero ten cuidado. Los toros como este a veces sorprenden con su resistencia... o con su rebeld?a. Markus no lo entendi? y el toro lo lanzo fuera de la silla de montar demasiado pronto. Recuerda la ?ltima vez: lo dejaste al borde del colapso, pero volvi?. Eso es lo que hace que valga la pena, ?no? Ver hasta d?nde puedes empujarlo antes de que se quiebre del todo." Su tono era calmado, pero tenia el objetivo de aconsejar a su hermana menor, como si estuviera probando a Sarah tanto como ellos pensaban probar a Alex. En su mente, Sabine reflexionaba sobre el equilibrio delicado de este juego. ?Cu?nto pod?a Sarah empujar los l?mites del esclavo antes de que ?l se desmoronara? Por un breve momento, ella Record? las noches en que ella misma hab?a sido la jinete en los rodeos de caballos humanos del condado, sintiendo aquella energ?a fluir a trav?s de sus venas... El dominio sobre un toro humano... pero tambi?n el vac?o que segu?a despu?s...
Sarah inclin? la cabeza, su sonrisa ampli?ndose mientras o?a las palabras de su hermana. "Tienes raz?n, Sabine. La ?ltima monta fue... emocionante. Lo sent? temblar bajo m?, luchando por cada paso, y eso me dio un sentimiento que no puedo explicar. Pero esta vez quiero m?s. Quiero que la monta se prolongue... que el esclavo se esfuerce y luche solo para ver c?mo su cuerpo se rompe por mi dominio. Que ?l entienda que su fuerza y brutalidad solo existen para servir como montura de su jinete en el rodeo de toro. Que ?l debe esforzarse hasta su l?mite. ?No es eso lo que significa este ejercicio?" Sus ojos brillaron con el deseo de de su nueva obsesi?n: Todo esto era solo un juego para ella, pero tambi?n era una manera de sentir que pertenec?a a este mundo retorcido.
Sabine asinti? ligeramente, una sonrisa curvando sus labios. "Es cierto, el control verdadero viene con la doma del toro humano. Pero, tal vez tengas raz?n, Sarah. A veces, un recordatorio firme es lo que hace falta para que entienda su lugar." Sabine dio un paso adelante, sus botas crujiendo contra la grava, acerc?ndose a Alex. "Arrod?llate, esclavo," orden?, su voz cortante como un cuchillo.
Alex, exhausto y tembloroso, obedeci? casi sin pensarlo, sus piernas cediendo bajo el peso del cansancio y el miedo. No se hab?a recuperado de la ?ltima monta. Sus m?sculos le dol?an. Cada respiraci?n era un esfuerzo, y su mente estaba nublada por el agotamiento. Cuando estuvo de rodillas sobre el suelo polvoriento, inclin? la cabeza instintivamente, con un sentimiento de confusi?n y miedo. Por un momento se pregunt? ?Por qu? estaba pasando esto? ?Qu? hab?a hecho ?l para merecer este tormento? En su interior, sent?a la humillaci?n por ser tratado como una bestia y miedo a lo que vendr?a. Permaneci? inm?vil, respirando todav?a con dificultad, mientras Sabine caminaba hacia su lado. Ella se inclino sujetando las riendas del toro humano.
Sabine manipul? el bocado y las bridas en la boca de Alex, ajustando el bocado con m?s firmeza, sus dedos rozando su piel. Se inclin? un poco m?s hacia ?l, tan cerca que Alex pudo sentir el aliento de ella en su oreja. Ella le susurro al o?do. Su voz era como el siseo de una serpiente: "Si no corres como yo quiero, esclavo, te arrancar? la piel a latigazos." Aquellas palabras eran suaves, pero fr?as y cargadas de una amenaza que hizo que un escalofr?o recorriera la piel de Alex. En la mente de Sabine, este era el momento de recordar a Alex su lugar y mostrarle su propio control sobre el caos del rodeo.
Los ojos de Alex se abrieron de par en par, con una expresi?n de miedo. Sabine sonri?, una curva cruel en sus labios que la hac?a parecer una hiena hambrienta de sangre. Levant? la fusta con un movimiento r?pido y la dej? caer sobre el muslo de Alex con fuerza. Un golpe que reson? en la arena y dej? una ardiente marca roja en su piel. Alex se retorci? por el dolor inesperado, un gemido escapando de su boca amordazada, pero solo Sabine pudo escucharlo. El impacto era un recordatorio brutal del control de Sabine, de su rol en este juego enfermizo, y el agotamiento que ya lo consum?a.
Luego, sin decir ni una palabra m?s, Sabine se apart?, volviendo a su lugar junto a la cerca como si nada hubiera pasado. En su interior, sent?a una oleada de satisfacci?n mezclada con fatiga; este juego la un?a a Sarah, pero tambi?n la ataba a un ciclo que empezaba a cuestionar.
Sarah, desde la cerca, sonri? y aplaudi? suavemente. "?Perfecto, Sabine! Creo que ahora est? listo para m?. Vamos a hacer que esta monta sea a?n mejor." Sus palabras eran como una promesa de m?s tormento.
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Ok, My friends, here is the chapter 5.3 in English
Chapter 5.3:
The Second Gallop - Part 1
The air in the arena smelled of worn leather and dry earth, mingling with Alex's sweat. The midday sun pounded the ground, raising a heat that made the horizon shimmer. Sarah, perched on the third rail of the corral gate, swung her cowboy boots in a playful rhythm as she waited to mount her new slave. But her eyes gleamed with a mix of challenge and delight that was anything but innocent.
Deep in her mind, Sarah was a whirlwind of contradictory emotions: a young woman driven by an insatiable desire for control, perhaps born from a childhood where she always felt overshadowed by her older brothers.
Sarah had experience riding real horses and the shoulders of human ponies. But an act of domination like this was a new experience for her, a way to claim center stage. Feeling the human bull bend to her will... it wasn't just another ride; it was a new thrill, something wild like a clash of her will against the slave's brutality, now cast in the role of a beast.
Riding this stallion gave her a sense of control that made her feel superior. That's how she saw herself. In that moment, her heart raced at the idea of feeling the strong stallion beneath the saddle.
Sarah watched the trembling of Alex's body; the fear the slave displayed was, to her, proof of her superiority.
But beneath that excitement lay a subtle sadism, a pleasure derived from seeing others suffer, as if every groan of someone else's pain confirmed her own power. She wasn't cruel by nature, or at least that's what she told herself; the thrill of riding Alex this way simply made her feel like the owner of his fate.
Sarah remained seated on the third rail of the corral gate, the leather cord tied to Alex's intimate parts hanging loosely in her hand, but she toyed with it between her fingers, coiling and uncoiling it with a smile that revealed her inner delight. Her grip was firm, as if testing the weight of her power over another's life. Her eyes, fixed on the trembling slave a short distance in front of her, held a morbid curiosity: how far could she push him before he broke? For Sarah, this human rodeo was a new world and an exciting game. A dance where she could direct every step.
Sabine, standing beside the fence, watched the scene with an indecipherable expression, her arms crossed and a riding crop hanging carelessly from her right hand. The black leather of the crop gleamed under the sun's glare, an unsettling contrast to her apparent calm and her icy heart. Sabine was different from her younger sister: she was the authoritarian leader with a cold heart who maintained order in her family, but inside her churned a storm of emotions. It wasn't just sadism that drove her; it was a need for control born from a turbulent past, where family chaos had forced her to harden.
Seeing Sarah enjoy these moments provoked in her a mix of envy and pride, as if she were watching a freer version of herself, but also a deep weariness, a questioning of whether this cycle of domination truly filled the void in her soul.
Suddenly, Sarah broke the silence with a light giggle, leaning slightly forward from her perch on the fence. "Look at him, Sabine... He seems so... exhausted. Like one more ride could break him. It makes me feel... invincible." Her voice was melodic, but it also had a playful tone that made her words feel cruel. In her mind, these words were like a confession: the pleasure she would get solely from watching Alex's spirit submit with every ride.
Sabine tilted her head, her eyes narrowing as she studied her sister. "Exhausted or not, Sarah, he's yours to ride. But be careful. Bulls like this sometimes surprise with their resilience... or their rebellion. Markus didn't get it, and the bull threw him off the saddle too soon. Remember last time: you left him on the edge of collapse, but he came back. That's what makes it worthwhile, isn't it? Seeing how far you can push him before he breaks completely." Her tone was calm, but it aimed to advise her younger sister, as if she were testing Sarah as much as they planned to test Alex. In her mind, Sabine reflected on the delicate balance of this game. How far could Sarah push the slave's limits before he crumbled? For a brief moment, she remembered the nights when she herself had been the rider in the county's human pony rodeos, feeling that energy course through her veins... Dominance over a human bull... but also the emptiness that followed...
Sarah tilted her head, her smile widening as she heard her sister's words. "You're right, Sabine. The last ride was... exciting. I felt him trembling under me, fighting for every step, and it gave me a feeling I can't explain. But this time, I want more. I want the ride to drag on... for the slave to strain and fight just to see his body break under my dominance. For him to understand that his strength and brutality exist only to serve as a mount for his rider in the bull riding rodeo. That he must push himself to his limit. Isn't that what this exercise is about?" Her eyes sparkled with the desire of her new obsession: All of this was just a game to her, but it was also a way to feel like she belonged in this twisted world.
Sabine nodded slightly, a smile curving her lips. "It's true, true control comes with breaking the human bull. But maybe you're right, Sarah. Sometimes, a firm reminder is what's needed to make him understand his place." Sabine stepped forward, her boots crunching against the gravel as she approached Alex. "Kneel, slave," she ordered, her voice sharp as a knife.
Alex, exhausted and trembling, obeyed almost without thinking, his legs giving way under the weight of fatigue and fear. He hadn't recovered from the last ride. His muscles ached. Every breath was an effort, and his mind was clouded by exhaustion. When he was on his knees on the dusty ground, he instinctively bowed his head, with a feeling of confusion and fear. For a moment, he wondered: Why was this happening? What had he done to deserve this torment? Inside, he felt the humiliation of being treated like a beast and fear of what was to come. He remained still, still breathing with difficulty, as Sabine walked to his side. She leaned in, grasping the reins of the human bull.
Sabine adjusted the bit and bridle in Alex's mouth more firmly, her fingers brushing his skin. She leaned in a little closer to him, so close that Alex could feel her breath on his ear. She whispered in his ear. Her voice was like the hiss of a snake: "If you don't run as I want, slave, I'll whip the skin off you." Those words were soft, but cold and loaded with a threat that sent a shiver down Alex's skin. In Sabine's mind, this was the moment to remind Alex of his place and show him her own control over the rodeo's chaos.
Alex's eyes widened in fear. Sabine smiled, a cruel curve on her lips that made her look like a hyena hungry for blood. She raised the crop with a quick motion and brought it down hard on Alex's thigh. A blow that echoed in the arena and left a burning red mark on his skin. Alex writhed from the unexpected pain, a groan escaping his gagged mouth, but only Sabine could hear it. The impact was a brutal reminder of Sabine's control, of her role in this sick game, and the exhaustion that was already consuming him.
Then, without another word, Sabine stepped back, returning to her spot by the fence as if nothing had happened. Inside, she felt a wave of satisfaction mixed with fatigue; this game bound her to Sarah, but it also tied her to a cycle she was beginning to question.
Sarah, from the fence, smiled and clapped softly. "Perfect, Sabine! I think he's ready for me now. Let's make this ride even better." Her words were like a promise of more torment.
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